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男神亲笔!《剑13》Test4大小作文解析及范文

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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

 

 

 

这!是一个不频繁的指令类型(提问形式)。由于不需要选边站,所以这个题目的论证逻辑不难;但是,话题本身有那么丢丢难度。

(谢谢为本篇范文的TR做出贡献的柳xy同学)

 

高分范文

01

Despite [“尽管”,介词,后面接名词] the development of agriculture, famine still exists globally. This miserable situation happens for at least a couple of reasons; however, fortunately, it does not have to persist [(顽固地)存在,不及物动词]. 

02

The first reason is that [名词性从句作表语-表语从句] although farming and breeding have developed, the prices of agricultural products have not accordingly been reduced to affordable levels. It is not farmers to blame. As a matter of fact, after a harvest is reaped, it is collected by traders before shoppers can choose the produce [“农产品”] on the shelves of markets. Those intermediary businesses [“中间商”], including retailers[“零售商”] , raise the prices to profitable [“有利润的”]levels that are often too high. Another reason is the inaccessibility of some areas. The inconvenience transportrenders these areas out of reach of modern vehicles, and therefore, foodstuff cannot arrive where it is needed. 

 

 

03

One solution, in response to [“应对于”] the first reason above, is toregulate food prices and make basic foodstuff affordable for all people. For example, legislators [“立法者”] could intervene in [“介入干预”(褒义)]the pricing process and curtail the profits that may be excessive [“过度的”]If [“如果”,条件状语从句] food prices could drop to reasonable levels, every household would afford enough food to feed every mouth. Another solution, to the second reason above, is to develop transportation. Since [“因为/既然”,引导原因状语从句] some regions whose food supply depends on imports may not have proper infrastructures [“基础设施”]of transport, such as roads, rail lines or airports, facilities must be constructed to ensure food delivery. 

[主体两个段落的核心/高频语法/句型点:状语从句]

04

In conclusion, although agriculture has been progressing [“进步/进展”,不及物], many people, around the world, still starve. A minimum of two reasons can account for [“解释”] this phenomenon, and two corresponding solutions are proposed. 

[良心话:最后这一句套话结尾不精彩却好安全也很省时间]

 Cambridge Past Papers Vol.13 Test 4  

《剑13》Test 4地图题 

 

 

审题&解析

 

剑13的第四套测试题的小作文(地图)是一道非常典型、非常基础的地图题模式,主要的大变化为改建或新增

 

由于这篇地图题的模式比较传统,因此本地图题的写作难点不在是Task Achievements而更多层面往其他三个评分标准上倾斜

 

若是简单地使用地图题的一般套句来描述相应的地图题中所呈现的变化,比较难写得出彩;换句话说,词汇的准确与灵活使用,语法表达的自然与多样在行文中将显得较为重要。

 

小作文范文

第一段:改写题目并点出主要的变化区域

The two maps illustrate the planned changes of a university’s sports center based on its current conditions.

 

第二段:按照箭头的指向,先描述入口区域的变化,从变大最大的部分开始着手进而写到小变化。

First, the entrance hall and the reception area will be expanded, with a sports shop and a café in the west and east corners. However, the central area of the premises will not change enormously, except that the gym will be extended eastward. The 25-meter swimming pool, the changing room and the seating space will remain the way they are.

 

第三段:由入口区域转向至东西方向的区域,承接上一段的思路,先写大变化后写小变化,期间可以通过一些连接词,给考官反映出写作逻辑顺序。

Immense changes will happen to the outdoor courts that are now independent of the central area. Replacing the west court, a leisure pool and a changing room on its south will be built. The east court will also be removed, and where it is now, there will be a number of facilities. First, a sizeable sports hall will share the wall with the seating area of the 25-meter pool. Second, directly opposite the sports hall, there will be a pair of dance studios. In addition, a changing room, closely adjacent to the café, will be built in the southeast corner.

 

第四段:固定操作部分:描述变化的幅度以及变化后的突出特点。

Overall, the sports center will have greater versatility.

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