11月4日托福独立写作题目“A government spends money on a training course that train adults after the age of 25 in the most up-to-date skills in the workplace.Do you think it is effective?Why or why not?”
写作范文
【立场:more likely to be ineffective than to be effective】
Introduction
A society needs a competent workforce equipped with up-to-date skills. Otherwise, it will be unproductive and fall behind the time. However, when the administration spends money on a nationwide work skills development training program where eligible trainees are only adults at the age of 25 or older, it should not expect the desired return.
Body (仅在第二个理由处做完整的段落展示)
First, the age of 25 may be a late point of start. 【短小的中心句】Instead, an earlier age would be far desirable. 【思路已明确,继续展开保密】
Second, what is the scale of the program? Is a nationwide scale too wide? 【两个短小的中心句且是(设)问句】 A large-scale program will soon meet many difficulties: there may be regional differences that tear the program apart; there may be additional costs that add up to a colossal amount; there may be cases of corruption during the distribution of money to the local districts. For example, just as 【引导“类比”】 a national school curriculum has to be alteredevery time as it is adopted in every individual region, a national training program has to go through the many times of change–too many to remain original. If the arrangement cannot remain the way it is, no effects should be credited to the original. (本段落116 words)
Third, is it an ongoing program at regular times? What if it cannot survive administrative changes and be a permanent undertaking? 【短小的中心句且是(设)问句】【思路已明确,继续展保密】
Conclusion
To conclude, hardly can I be optimistic about the effectiveness of the program. I think it is more likely to be a failure or a borderline pass than to be a success.