剑桥雅思5test2大作文范文

　剑桥雅思5test2大作文题目：

　　In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people to do this.

　　雅思写作考官范文1：

　　It is quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break from studying after graduating from high school. This trend is not restricted to rich students who have the money to travel, but is also evident among poorer students who choose to work and become economically independent for a period of time.

　　The reasons for this trend may involve the recognition that a young adult who passes directly from school to university is rather restricted in terms of general knowledge and experience of the world. By contrast, those who have spent some time earning a living or traveling to other places have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on. They tend to be more independent, which is a very important factor in academic study and research, as well as giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of student life.

　　However, there are certainly dangers in taking time off at that important age. Young adults may end up never returning to their studies or finding it difficult to readapt to an academic environment. They may think that it is better to continue in a particular job, or to do something completely different from a university course. But overall, I think this is less likely today, when academic qualifications are essential for getting a reasonable career.

　　My view is that young people should be encouraged to broaden their horizons. That is the best way for them to get a clear perspective of what they are hoping to do with their lives and why. Students with such a perspective are usually the most effective and motivated ones and taking a year off may be the best way to gain this.

　　雅思写作考官范文翻译：

　　在有些国家，年轻人在高中毕业和大学学习开始之间，被鼓励去工作或旅行一年。讨论年轻人做这个的优点和缺点。

　　在很多国家，在年轻人高中毕业脱离了学习的这段期间，这种做法是很常见的。这种趋势虽然不仅限于有钱的富学生去旅游，但是选择工作和经济独立的一段时间，在较穷的学生中也很明显。

　　这种趋势的原因可能涉及这样的认识，一个年轻的直接从中学通到大学的成年人，在对这世界普遍的认知和体验方面都是相当局限的。相反，那些花了一些时间谋生或前往其他地方旅行的人会有一个广阔的人生观和更好的可利用的个人资源。他们更倾向于独立，这对于学术的学习研究，是一个非常重要的因素，在应对充满挑战的学生生活方面，也能给予他们优势。

　　然而，在这个重要的年纪去休假也有一定的危险。年轻的成年人可能最终也没有返回到自己的研究学习中去，或可能最终发现很难重新适应一个学术环境。他们可能会认为继续某个特定的工作会更好，或做一些和大学课程完全不同的事。但总的来说，我认为在这个获得学历对于获得还算好的职业生涯而言至关重要的当今是不太可能的。

　　我的观点是应该鼓励年轻人去开阔眼界。这对于他们能有个这一生打算去做什么和为什么去做的合理判断而言是非常好的方式。有这种正确认识的学生通常是最有效和最积极的，休假一年或许是获得这种认知的非常好方式。

 

　　新航道点评：

　　题目

　　In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.

　　Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

　　典型的，也是同学们最熟悉的大作文的题目advantages and disadvantages，呵呵，想也不想就可以开工了。不过大家注意了，题目的重点实在介绍对立双方的观点，而不是注重谈你的看法，别把文章重心搞错了。不同于Some people support the trend. On the other hand, others oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 这样出题强调是作者的观点。

　　开头段

　　It is quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break from studying after graduating from high school.

　　It is quite common these days for sb to do sth 好庸俗的开头啊，不过不要紧，模版本身也是大伙用多了，就叫做模版，文章不会因为某个句子，就说你是模版，而在于整体的协调，就像一个人漂亮一样，协调是最重要的

　　break [c] 中断，休息 a coffee break

　　The trend is not restricted to rich students who have the money to travel, but is also evident among poorer students who choose to work and become economically independent for a period of time.

　　指出了rich students和poorer students的同样选择

　　The trend is not restricted to A, but is also evident among B 这个句型强调同样的两种趋势，用得实在是太好了，相当于 Both A and B do sth.

　　主体一段

　　The reasons or this trend may involve the recognition that a young adult who passes directly from school to university is rather restricted in terms of general knowledge and experience of the world.

　　开始说需要休学的原因“没有休学的话，学生在一般知识和世界经验方面相当局限”

　　The reasons fro this trend may involve the recognition that….表明原因的句型

　　Reason behind/for sth;注意reason后面的prep，如He explained the reason behind this decision.

　　In terms of/ in respect of: 关于某方面

　　By contrast, those who have spent some time earning a living or travelling to other places, have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on.

　　对照说明原因一“休学的话，学生有更广阔的人生视角和更好的个人资源”

　　对照的措辞

　　不休学的学生：a young adult who passes directly from school to university

　　休学的学生：those who have spent some time earning a living or traveling to other places

　　人生局限：be restricted in terms of general knowledge and experience of the world

　　人生广阔：have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on

　　They tend to be more independent, which is a very important factor in academic study and research, as well as giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of student life.

　　继续说明休学的好处(原因二)：更独立，这给理论学习和研究带来好处，同时给处理挑战时有优势

　　which是指代前面那句话they tend to be more independent，which从句实际上表达因果关系中的果，in academic study and research和giving them an advantage in terms of用as well as(并列连词)共同修饰factor的

　　主体二段

　　However, there are certainly dangers in taking time off at the important age.

　　However, 引出了disadvantages, there are certainly dangers in doing sth很简单，也很常用

　　in doing sth ; in [prep] 表原因，如in refusing (because she refused) to work abroad, she missed an excellent job opportunity.

　　Young adults may end up never returning to their studies or finding it difficult to readapt to an academic environment.

　　表示有害性的表现，

　　end up 这个词组很重要，朗文解释为 to be in a particular situation, state or place after a series of events, especially when you do not plan it. 常见的表达为

　　end up in doing sth: After working around the world, she ended up teaching a foreign language.

　　end up+adj: If she carries on spending like this, she will end up penniless.

　　end up +介词短语：He came around for a cup of coffee and we ended up in bed together.

　　They may think that it is better to continue in a particular job, or to do something completely different from a university course.

　　进一步说明有害性表现的动机(也就是原因)：They may think that

　　But overall, I think this is less likely today, when academic qualifications are essential for getting a reasonable career.

　　反驳这个想法

　　Overall [adv] 评注性句子副词，on the whole, generally

　　When修饰的是today

　　结尾段

　　My view is that young people should be encouraged to broaden their horizons. That is the best way for them to get a clear perspective of what they are hoping to do with their lives and why. Students with such a perspective are usually the most effective and motivated ones and taking a year off may be the best way to gain this.

　　My view is that表明作者的立场，但是注意作者并没有直接回答作者题目，而是采用两个很类似的说理句群，最后落脚点是taking a year off may be the best way to gain this，才回答题目的问题

　　这段的说理有点绕，注意两个说理句群

　　句群一：that is the best way for them to get a clear perspective; 其中way就是to broaden their horizons，目的是get a clear perspective;

　　句群二：taking off may be the best way to gain this;其中way是指 taking a year off，目的是students with such a perspective are the most effective and motivated ones

　　还原作者写作流程：

　　审题：

　　Advantages and disadvantages 其实不就是“有人支持，有人反对，说说他们各自的原因并谈谈你的看法”，老一套了，这个题跑偏的可能性应当为零，看法吗，我倾向于学生们应当休学。

　　框架

　　开头段：介绍背景，先来一句俗不可耐的话，各国高中生休学的这个现象很普遍，在想想，休学高中生可以大概分为两种人：有钱的：休学是去旅游(没啥了不起的，以前欧洲的富家子弟就有游学的风俗);没钱的：休学去挣钱;两种人都普遍。

　　主体一段：介绍advantage，采用对比的方式进行说理，高中生没休学的见识少，经验差;相反，高中生休学的见识广，资源丰富。为了突出advantage，再加一条有点，更加独立(因此好做科研，好处理一些挑战)。

　　主体二段：介绍disadvantages, 就是休学学生不上学了或者发现上学很困难了。如何展开：先说明原因，再说明这种做法是有害的。

　　结尾段：这段的把我的观点明确表示出来，我支持休学。注意虽然与主体一段道理是一致的，但要注意同义表达，这就有点难度了，一样的意思，不一样的表达(尤其是句式转换)。

　　遣词造句：

　　注意几个段首句的使用：

　　主体一段: The reasons for this trend involve the recognition that…

　　主体二段：However, there are certainly dangers in doing sth

　　结尾段： My view is that…

　　假如是我?

　　这类advantages and disadvantages，不过文章强调的是双方的看法，而不是作者的观点，这就得从文章各段长度上反映出来，disadvantages和advantages这两种观点应当差不多长度相等。

 

　　雅思写作范文2：

　　Nowadays, it is quite common that after graduating high school, students will go to travel or work for one year before they go to college. Many people think it is harm for young people but others stand on the opposite side. For this question, there are numerous disadvantages, and also a lot of advantages at the same time.

　　People, who advocate that traveling and working is harmful for students, give their reasons as follows. Knowledge system is complete, if you work or travel for one year between your graduation of high school and start of university, it means that the whole knowledge system is seperated into two parts, and when you back to school, it is difficult for you to get into the tense of study. And young people may also squander a lot of time.

　　On the contrary, a growing number of people claim that spending time to work or travel is good for their college study. On the one hand, when high school students stretch their power energy in high school year, they deserve to have time to relax. It is an excellent way for them to be rife with energy and then start their univeristy life. On the other hand, working is a facilitate way to learn about soceity. It is not only good for their study, but also helpful for them to find a satisfied job after graduation.

　　This issue should be well taken into consideration. As to how to address this problem, I am convinced that it depends on actual situation.