剑桥雅思6test4写作大作文：Change or not change

　剑桥雅思6test4写作大作文：Change or not change

　　WRITING TASK 2

　　You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

　　Write about the following topic:

　　Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.

　　Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

　　Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

　　Write at least 250 words.

 

　　雅思写作范文1:

　　This model has been prepared by an examiner as an example of a very good answer. However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.

　　Over the last half century the pace of change in the life of human beings has increased beyond our wildest expectations. This has been driven by technological and scientific breakthroughs that are changing the whole way we view the world on an almost daily basis. This means that change is not always a personal option, but an inescapable fact of life, and we need to constantly adapt to keep pace with it.

　　Those people who believe they have achieved some security by doing the same, familiar things are living in denial. Even when people believe they are resisting change themselves, they cannot stop the world around them from changing. Sooner or later they will find that the familiar jobs no longer exist, or that the ‘safe’ patterns of behaviour are no longer appropriate.

　　However, reaching the conclusion that change is inevitable is not the same as assuming that ‘change is always for the better’. Unfortunately, it is not always the case that new things are promoted because they have good impacts for the majority of people. A lot of innovations are made with the aim of making money for a few. This is because it is the rich and powerful people in our society who are able to impose changes (such as in working conditions or property developments) that are in their own interests.

　　In conclusion, I would say that change can be stimulating and energising for individuals when they pursue it themselves, but that all change, including that which is imposed on people, does not necessarily have good outcomes.

 

　　题解

　　一些人喜欢一辈子都做同样的事情，避免变化。而其他人认为变化总是好事。讨论这两种观点并提出你的看法。

　　参考译文

　　过去半个世纪人类生活的变化速度远远超出我们的想象。这一变化是由于科技突破推动的，这些科技进步几乎每天都在改变我们看待世界的方式。这意味着变化并不总是个人的选择，而是无法回避的生活事实，而我们需要不断适应以赶上变化。

　　那些相信可以通过做同样的、熟悉的事情来获得某种安全感的人们是在自欺欺人。即便人们认为他们自己在抵制变化，他们也无法阻止周围世界的变化。他们迟早会发现熟悉的工作不再存在，或者行为的“安全”模式不再合适。

　　但是，得出变化不可避免的结论不等于假设“变化总会变得更好”。不幸的是，新事物被推动并不总是因为对大多数人有好处。许多革新的目的是为少数人谋利。这是因为正是我们社会里有钱和有权的人们才有能力施加有助于他们自己的利益的变化(比如在工作环境或者地产发展方面)。

　　总之，我认为变化对于那些追逐变化的人们来说是令人兴奋，鼓舞人心的，但并不是所有的变化都必定会有好结果，这其中也包含施加于人的变化。

　　分析

　　本文和Test 2一样，都是Discuss类考题。但本文的写作结构和论证过程与Test 2的范文有一定区别。

　　Test 2的段话纯粹交代事实，而本文的开头指出变化无处不在，也无法避免，融进了作者的观点，表明避免变化是不可能的。

　　第二段话不是分析反方的观点，而是直接反驳观点一的理由。第三段话也并没有论证正方的观点，而是指出观点二的理由并不总能立住脚，指出变化并不总是会变得更好，而只是使得少数掌握资源的人变得更好，其他人则无法支配变化。

　　结尾总结观点，指出变化对于那些主动追求变化、能掌控变化的人来说是好的，而对于其他人，尤其是被动面对变化的人来说则未必如此。

　　总的来说，本文并没有采用完全平衡式的论证方法，最后表明自己倾向于某种观点，而是指出两种观点在某种程度上的合理之处以及局限所在，从而得出自己的看法。这种写法比较适合Discuss中两种观点都不够完善，无法完全同意的情况。

　　大漠点评：

　　题目

　　Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.

　　认真看一下这个题目，狡猾狡猾的，因为这个话题的两个观点不是完全对立的，而是从不同的角度来表述这个问题：一方面，一些人拒绝改变(拒绝改变是一种结果，其原因可能是不喜欢改变或是害怕改变，甚至是不知道周围是变化的);另一方面，一些人认为改变经常是件好事(认为改变是件好事是一种观点，也就是原因，可能行为是尝试新鲜事物等)。所以回答这个问题就不存在中立、倾向或一边倒，而是把问题一个个回答掉。

　　段：

　　Over the last half century the pace of change in the life of human beings has increased beyond our wildest expectations.

　　介绍背景，老调重弹

　　beyond 词组经常用到: beyond doubt 毋容置疑;

　　beyond recognition 无可辨认;

　　beyond expectations 不可想象;

　　This has been driven by technological and scientific breakthroughs that can changing the whole way we view the world on an almost daily basis.

　　这句话说明technological and scientific breakthroughs 产生了两个作用 drive this (the pace of change has increased); change the whole way we view the world, 很是狡猾

　　This means that change is not always a personal option, but an inescapable fact of life, and we need to constantly adapt to keep pace with it.

　　实际上开始接触到问题了，not a person option, but an inescapable fact of life的这句很有哲理，而且经常用到，大家记住

　　第二段

　　Those people who believe they have achieved some security by doing the same, familiar things are living in denial.

　　直接回答文章的问，those people are living in denial

　　in denial 介词短语，拒绝承认事实(refusing to admit the truth or reality of something unpleasant),举例a patient in denial about his health problems

　　Even when people believe they are resisting change themselves, they cannot stop the world around them from changing.

　　解释他们“生活在一种不愿面对真相的状态中 live in denial”

　　When [conj]: although 尽管，表转折，并非常见的表时间

　　Sooner or later they will find that the familiar jobs no longer exist, or that the ‘safe’ patterns of behavior are no longer appropriate.

　　接着解释 they will find that .. . that

　　第三段

　　However, reaching the conclusion that change is inevitable is not the same as assuming that ‘change is always for the better’.

　　相当于把两问都给否定了，A is not the same as B

　　句子用词的多样化：

　　Reaching the conclusion对应assuming

　　Evitable 对应首段的 inescapable

　　Unfortunately, it is not always the case that news things are prompted because they have good impacts for the majority of people.新事物被推动并不总是因为对大多数人有好处

　　接着解释，it is not always the case, case指reality 事实

　　解释原因的着力点 the majority of people，就是“是否代表最广大人们的根本利益”，看看老外学“三个代表”真是活学活用

　　A lot of innovations are made with the aim of making money for a few. This is because it is the rich and powerful people in our society who are able to impose changes (such as in working conditions or property developments) that are in their interests.这是因为正是我们社会里有钱和有权的人们才有能力推动符合他们自己的利益的变化(比如在工作环境或者房地产发展方面)。

　　结果,It is because +原因，前果后因的因果关系，大家多学习学习

　　It is people who…that 多层复合关系的从句结构需搞清楚

　　Such as文章举例，使其具体化

　　Sth is in one’s interest 符合某人的利益， be in the public/national interest

　　第四段：

　　In conclusion, I would say that change can be stimulating and energizing for individuals when they pursue it themselves, but that all change, including which is imposed on people, does not necessarily have good outcomes.总之，我认为变化对于那些追逐变化的人们来说是令人兴奋，鼓舞人心的，但并不是所有的变化都必定会有好结果，这其中也包含施加于人的变化。

　　I would say标志着我的观点的正式出现，而且把两个问题回答强调一下

　　Pursue对应问中的avoid，not have good outcomes回答了第二问

　　审题

　　这个题目很阴险，不是简单的是非问题，而是同一个话题两种不同观点，但观点的侧重点又有所不同，那好办，就一个问题一个问题解决。

　　问题一:Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. 世界是变化的，你只能使用变化，而非逃避变化;

　　问题二:Others think that change is always a good thing，变化有可能都是好事，有时也是坏事

　　框架

　　段：这一段谈谈背景，引入话题。由于技术的进步，变化无处不在，体现在两个方面：人类生活节奏加快和我们看待世界的看法。这是个谁也逃避不了的现实。

　　第二段：回答题目的问，喜欢做熟悉事情的人是不愿意承认事实，应为这是他们逃避不了的现实，很快他们就会发现他们熟悉的工作不存在，或者是安全的行为方式不合适。

　　第三段：回答题目的第二问，开头这句话得将二三两段联系起来，所以就说改变是不可避免的并不等同于改变总是好的。因为有些改变只符合权贵的利益，并不有利于广大人民群众。

　　第四段：结尾段，得把两个问题联系起来，做一个简单的归纳。当人们主动追求变化时，这个改变就是令人振奋的，但并不是所有的变化都会产生积极的后果。

　　假如是我?

　　看到这个问题，头脑里闪出的就是有句歌词“不是我不明白，是因为世界变化快。”一看这两个问题，还是很好回答的，下面就开始吧。

　　段：介绍背景，无论是谁，都是这一套

　　第二段：回答个问题，拒绝变化的的做法是不可能的。因为变化时恒定存在的，而且个人来讲不能惧怕变化，积极的面对变化，有时能使人得到更大的发展，所以叫做opportunity

　　第三段：回答第二个问题，变化的结构有好有坏，如核技术的发明，可以用来发电，服务人类，也可用来制造核武器，毁灭人类，所以科学技术的变化带来的双重影响。

　　第四段：再次强调自己的观点，既然变化是肯定存在的，我们就必须积极面对，同时积极的杜绝消极的影响，让变化造福人类等。

 

　　雅思写作范文2：

　　In modern society, there are two types of lives. Some people like to lead a stable life, without change. Others prefer changing to static. Both kinds of people have their admittedly reasons to support themselves.

　　The ones who advocate steady life is comfortable give their points as follows. First of all, long-term of work can provide a reliable source of income. Changing jobs frequently maybe hard for a family to live comfortable. Secondly, movement of home is quite usual. This activity can cost you a great deal of finance to deal with this problem. Besides, shuttling among different kinds of job cannot make you gather the experience of a type of subject. Because you often change the way to face the subjects while changing your jobs. After few decades, you may still a freshman in your job.

　　On the contrary, audacious young people like changable life much better than the people above who are interested in steadly life. They are convinced that diversity of life is a treasure of our experience. When we grow more mature in considering questions. What's more, when we change our life styles, we indeed get a quality of how to adapt new life. According to the mental research, people who own adaption ability may hardly feel lonely, and the risk of develop psychologic illness can be dicreased. So changing lives can groom the qualities of youngsters.

　　For my part, I would like to share the last point of view. Because I am a young man now, so changing life is a good opportunity for the people like me to join into the society and develop the ability of adapting new life styles.